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Post by guitaristemily on Nov 20, 2011 8:29:59 GMT -5
Name: leafkit Age: 1 moon Rank: kit Allegiance: windclan Picture:  i could only find that one Appearance: a black and white cat Personality: a easy-going kit History: she cant rember her parents but she was abandond outside camp when she was born
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Post by ☜killjoy creamy☞ on Nov 20, 2011 9:17:51 GMT -5
Hi there, guitaristemily!
Great bio so far, however I'm afraid you'll need to change a few things before I can accept it.
1. Appearance and Persinality must be 150+ words.
2. According to her age, History must be 100+
3. I'm afraid half-clan cats are not allowed so she could not have been abandoned outsidecamp, her parents must both be members of WindClan.
4. There are also a few spelling mistakes, but nothing major.
When you have modified your bio correctly I will be able to accept it!
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Post by guitaristemily on Nov 20, 2011 14:37:46 GMT -5
Hi there, guitaristemily! Great bio so far, however I'm afraid you'll need to change a few things before I can accept it. 1. Appearance and Persinality must be 150+ words. 2. According to her age, History must be 100+ 3. I'm afraid half-clan cats are not allowed so she could not have been abandoned outsidecamp, her parents must both be members of WindClan. 4. There are also a few spelling mistakes, but nothing major. When you have modified your bio correctly I will be able to accept it! will do but in the books firstar is a kittypet who joined the clan |
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Post by ☜killjoy creamy☞ on Nov 20, 2011 14:41:30 GMT -5
Yes, but on this particular role-play site those are the rules.
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Post by guitaristemily on Nov 20, 2011 17:07:19 GMT -5
ok, i will edit it when i get in from school tomrrow
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Post by Toadstool on Nov 21, 2011 6:42:48 GMT -5
Please also remember to be literate and use proper grammar, Emily.  |
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